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Sailor Moon OC Critique
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Rules-
1. Copy the form, post it on your dA and send the link to one of us.
2. Don't reformat the form where it is any combination of bold, underlined, and/or italicized.
3. You have the right to ignore criticism, you don't have the right to blow up at us for giving it. Please also avoid telling us that you don't care what we said, it's a bit rude.
4. For help, we recommend you check out www.otakusenshi.com you may also ask quarktastic or myself too.
5. For the 'Appearance:' portions, we've decided that you're NOT ALLOWED to use any sort of dollmakers, recolors (Unless you have a VERY GOOD REASON.), or commissioned artwork. Bases are okay to an extent, but only as long as it's only the body being used and there is creativity apparent.
6. If you wish you can completely replace the Japanese names for the English dub names if your story/RP takes place in the dub continuity.
[OC Form]
[Civilian Section]
Name:
Name's Meaning:
Protagonist or Antagonist?:
Gender:
Age:
Height:
Body Type:
Appearance (We'd rather you describe them in detail, or if possible, provide a link to your own picture.):
Family:
Personality:
Personal History:
Friends:
How did they meet their friends?:
Enemies:
Why are they enemies?:
Crush:
Why, and how did they meet?:
Does anyone have a crush on your OC? If so, why?:
Jot down a few sentences for each crush on how you, as in you the author, view their personality:
Rival:
Why, and how did the rivalry start?:
Goals:
Fears:
Personal Growth Trajectory (Briefly describe how your OC will develop throughout the story. And by that we don't mean your OC's personal achievements, but internal/psychological stuff):
Which continuity are they for? (Ex. manga, anime, PGSM):
[Senshi/Knight Section]
Sailor/Knight Name:
Sailor/Knight Title(s):
Realm of Influence(s) (Ex. Mars's RoI is fire):
Home Planet:
What is their Home planet like?:
Planet Symbol:
Transformation Item(s):
How did they obtain this item?:
Weapon(s):
What is the significance of the weapon?:
How did they obtain this weapon?:
Misc. Item(s) Ex. Usagi's Disguise Pen:
What does this item do?:
How did they obtain it?:
Guardian (Ex. Luna):
Briefly describe their guardian:
Sailor/Knight Uniform (Again, same rules apply as with the appearance):
Sailor's/Knight's History:
[Attack List (If they have more than 2 attacks, just continue using the questions provided)]
1. Attack Name:
What does this attack do?
Describe it:
What is its power level?:
2. Attack Name:
What does this attack do?
Describe it:
What is its power level?:
Opinions (If your OC has never met a certain character, or has a neutral opinion of them, ERASE THEIR NAME.)
(Also, depending on the continuity, some of these may not apply.)
[Protagonists]
Usagi Tsukino/Sailor Moon/Neo-Queen Serenity:
Mamoru Chiba/Tuxedo Mask/Neo-King Endymion:
Small Lady Serenity/Chibiusa:
Ami Mizuno/Sailor Mercury:
Rei Hino/Sailor Mars:
Makoto Kino/Sailor Jupiter:
Minako Aino/Sailor Venus:
Haruka Tenoh/Sailor Uranus:
Michiru Kaioh/Sailor Neptune:
Hotaru Tomoe/Sailor Saturn:
Setsuna Meioh/Sailor Pluto
Luna:
Artemis:
Diana:
Helios:
CereCere/Sailor Ceres:
JunJun/Sailor Juno:
PallaPalla/Sailor Pallas:
VesVes/Sailor Vesta:
Phobos:
Deimos:
Queen Serenity (Moon Kingdom era):
Seiya Kou/Sailor Star Fighter:
Yaten Kou/Sailor Star Healer:
Taiki Kou/Sailor Star Maker:
Princess Kakyuu/Sailor Kakyuu:
Chibi-Chibi/Sailor Chibi-Chibi:
Sailor Cosmos:
[Antagonists]
Queen Metallia:
Queen Beryl:
Kunzite:
Nephrite:
Zoicite:
Jadeite:
Wiseman/Death Phantom:
Prince Diamande/Diamond:
Prince Saphir/Sapphire:
Esmeraude/Emerald:
Rubeus:
Berthier/Bertie:
Calaveras/Avery:
Petz/Prizma:
Koan/Catzy:
Pharaoh 90:
Mistress 9:
Souichi Tomoe:
Kaolinite:
Mimete:
Eudial:
Tellu:
Viluy:
Cyprine:
Ptilol:
Zirconia:
Queen Nehellenia:
Fisheye:
Hawk's Eye:
Tiger's Eye:
Chaos:
Sailor Galaxia:
Sailor Iron Mouse:
Sailor Tin Nyanko:
Sailor Lead Crow:
Sailor Heavymetal Papillon:
Sailor Aluminum Siren:
Sailor Phi:
Sailor Chi:
Sailor Lethe:
Sailor Mnemosyne:
[Roleplay] ***READ EACH QUESTION CAREFULLY!***
1. Alignment Flaw:
What traits might cause your character to fall to the "dark side?" (Or, if a villain or evil alignment, turn good.) This question is hypothetical, so you have some creative free reign over it, it does not have to actually happen within your story or roleplay. Write a quick story summary illustrating their "fall," the consequences, and whether or not the character would try to come back. (And by summary we mean a couple not-too-detailed paragraphs.)
Personality Traits:
Motivation:
Course of Action:
Consequences:
Do they realize they've fallen? Why/how?:
Do they try to go back? How? (Do not answer whether or not they are accepted back, it doesn't say much about the OC being discussed, though it does tell us about the other characters.):
Relationship Flaw:
Your character has hurt the one they care most about. Same deal as above: illustrate with a summary the events, traits, and attempts to reconcile, if any.
Personality Traits:
Motivation:
Loved one and hurtful action:
Consequences:
General Mistake:
Same as above, describe the traits that cause, the events, and the consequences, of the most serious error your character could commit.
Personality Traits:
Motivation:
Mistake:
Consequences:
2. Your crush is badly injured in a fight and the villain is escaping! Your crush insists they'll be fine on their own and tells you to chase after the enemy. What do you do?
1. Copy the form, post it on your dA and send the link to one of us.
2. Don't reformat the form where it is any combination of bold, underlined, and/or italicized.
3. You have the right to ignore criticism, you don't have the right to blow up at us for giving it. Please also avoid telling us that you don't care what we said, it's a bit rude.
4. For help, we recommend you check out www.otakusenshi.com you may also ask quarktastic or myself too.
5. For the 'Appearance:' portions, we've decided that you're NOT ALLOWED to use any sort of dollmakers, recolors (Unless you have a VERY GOOD REASON.), or commissioned artwork. Bases are okay to an extent, but only as long as it's only the body being used and there is creativity apparent.
6. If you wish you can completely replace the Japanese names for the English dub names if your story/RP takes place in the dub continuity.
[OC Form]
[Civilian Section]
Name:
Name's Meaning:
Protagonist or Antagonist?:
Gender:
Age:
Height:
Body Type:
Appearance (We'd rather you describe them in detail, or if possible, provide a link to your own picture.):
Family:
Personality:
Personal History:
Friends:
How did they meet their friends?:
Enemies:
Why are they enemies?:
Crush:
Why, and how did they meet?:
Does anyone have a crush on your OC? If so, why?:
Jot down a few sentences for each crush on how you, as in you the author, view their personality:
Rival:
Why, and how did the rivalry start?:
Goals:
Fears:
Personal Growth Trajectory (Briefly describe how your OC will develop throughout the story. And by that we don't mean your OC's personal achievements, but internal/psychological stuff):
Which continuity are they for? (Ex. manga, anime, PGSM):
[Senshi/Knight Section]
Sailor/Knight Name:
Sailor/Knight Title(s):
Realm of Influence(s) (Ex. Mars's RoI is fire):
Home Planet:
What is their Home planet like?:
Planet Symbol:
Transformation Item(s):
How did they obtain this item?:
Weapon(s):
What is the significance of the weapon?:
How did they obtain this weapon?:
Misc. Item(s) Ex. Usagi's Disguise Pen:
What does this item do?:
How did they obtain it?:
Guardian (Ex. Luna):
Briefly describe their guardian:
Sailor/Knight Uniform (Again, same rules apply as with the appearance):
Sailor's/Knight's History:
[Attack List (If they have more than 2 attacks, just continue using the questions provided)]
1. Attack Name:
What does this attack do?
Describe it:
What is its power level?:
2. Attack Name:
What does this attack do?
Describe it:
What is its power level?:
Opinions (If your OC has never met a certain character, or has a neutral opinion of them, ERASE THEIR NAME.)
(Also, depending on the continuity, some of these may not apply.)
[Protagonists]
Usagi Tsukino/Sailor Moon/Neo-Queen Serenity:
Mamoru Chiba/Tuxedo Mask/Neo-King Endymion:
Small Lady Serenity/Chibiusa:
Ami Mizuno/Sailor Mercury:
Rei Hino/Sailor Mars:
Makoto Kino/Sailor Jupiter:
Minako Aino/Sailor Venus:
Haruka Tenoh/Sailor Uranus:
Michiru Kaioh/Sailor Neptune:
Hotaru Tomoe/Sailor Saturn:
Setsuna Meioh/Sailor Pluto
Luna:
Artemis:
Diana:
Helios:
CereCere/Sailor Ceres:
JunJun/Sailor Juno:
PallaPalla/Sailor Pallas:
VesVes/Sailor Vesta:
Phobos:
Deimos:
Queen Serenity (Moon Kingdom era):
Seiya Kou/Sailor Star Fighter:
Yaten Kou/Sailor Star Healer:
Taiki Kou/Sailor Star Maker:
Princess Kakyuu/Sailor Kakyuu:
Chibi-Chibi/Sailor Chibi-Chibi:
Sailor Cosmos:
[Antagonists]
Queen Metallia:
Queen Beryl:
Kunzite:
Nephrite:
Zoicite:
Jadeite:
Wiseman/Death Phantom:
Prince Diamande/Diamond:
Prince Saphir/Sapphire:
Esmeraude/Emerald:
Rubeus:
Berthier/Bertie:
Calaveras/Avery:
Petz/Prizma:
Koan/Catzy:
Pharaoh 90:
Mistress 9:
Souichi Tomoe:
Kaolinite:
Mimete:
Eudial:
Tellu:
Viluy:
Cyprine:
Ptilol:
Zirconia:
Queen Nehellenia:
Fisheye:
Hawk's Eye:
Tiger's Eye:
Chaos:
Sailor Galaxia:
Sailor Iron Mouse:
Sailor Tin Nyanko:
Sailor Lead Crow:
Sailor Heavymetal Papillon:
Sailor Aluminum Siren:
Sailor Phi:
Sailor Chi:
Sailor Lethe:
Sailor Mnemosyne:
[Roleplay] ***READ EACH QUESTION CAREFULLY!***
1. Alignment Flaw:
What traits might cause your character to fall to the "dark side?" (Or, if a villain or evil alignment, turn good.) This question is hypothetical, so you have some creative free reign over it, it does not have to actually happen within your story or roleplay. Write a quick story summary illustrating their "fall," the consequences, and whether or not the character would try to come back. (And by summary we mean a couple not-too-detailed paragraphs.)
Personality Traits:
Motivation:
Course of Action:
Consequences:
Do they realize they've fallen? Why/how?:
Do they try to go back? How? (Do not answer whether or not they are accepted back, it doesn't say much about the OC being discussed, though it does tell us about the other characters.):
Relationship Flaw:
Your character has hurt the one they care most about. Same deal as above: illustrate with a summary the events, traits, and attempts to reconcile, if any.
Personality Traits:
Motivation:
Loved one and hurtful action:
Consequences:
General Mistake:
Same as above, describe the traits that cause, the events, and the consequences, of the most serious error your character could commit.
Personality Traits:
Motivation:
Mistake:
Consequences:
2. Your crush is badly injured in a fight and the villain is escaping! Your crush insists they'll be fine on their own and tells you to chase after the enemy. What do you do?
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Just in case you guys didn't see it the first time, here's a link with lots of useful info on creating an otaku senshi, and also a forum community where you can have your senshi reviewed by its members! [link]
Also be aware of some slight personal taste factors from quarktastic and I. For example, she'll have difficulties critiquing a Sailor Sun since the concept doesn't work in her head.
You may find quartastic here: [link]
EDIT PLEASE READ, VERY IMPORTANT: I just want to remind everyone to please read rule 5 on the critique about acceptable artwork. Thank you.
Also be aware of some slight personal taste factors from quarktastic and I. For example, she'll have difficulties critiquing a Sailor Sun since the concept doesn't work in her head.
You may find quartastic here: [link]
EDIT PLEASE READ, VERY IMPORTANT: I just want to remind everyone to please read rule 5 on the critique about acceptable artwork. Thank you.
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